Your heroine is whiney and the love interest guy is way too good for her. And a love triangle? People are just gonna close the book the second they think there's a triangle. And what does your character have to whine about, anyway? She's got everything she could want, doesn't she? And speaking of the world she lives in--did you know none of it makes sense?
I can hear you laughing but I swear, it's all true. It's basically what my editor told me the other day. Of course she tried to tell it in a way that didn't make me want to cry, but I know what I heard. And you know what? She wasn't wrong!
The solutions came to me, and I've begun the work of fixing. I'm working on a new beginning chapter, and then I'll have to weave in the changes throughout the whole book because there's always a ripple effect.
Wish me luck!
p.s. I love my editor! She's making my book better, and that's a good thing!